I cannot finish this book. And I honestly don't know how to rate it. I've sworn to myself not to bother with books where I have to force myself to read it. The story is very promising. The world building is not bad but the characters could use some more work. I think this could have been a great military scifi novel if it wasn't for the writing. 1.) Names! It is a pet peeve of mine when a writer uses names almost all the time. Example: "Oh, hey, Kabuto...uhh err I mean, Seargant." "No need for that, Gideon." or Kabuto asked, "Hey, Gideon, you okay?" "Yes, Kabuto. It's just very captivating." "Haven't you seen the surface before?" "Well, actually, Kabuto, no...I...haven't," Maybe it is just me but WHO talks like that? I mean, I can see the usage of names where it's needed but this style is rather annoying to me. I may have the attention span of a tea spoon but I am usually able to follow conversations between two or more people without having to be constantly reminded of who, what to whom and so on. There is three times Kabuto. By that time I've already gotten sick of that name from hearing (or reading for that matter) it so much. 2.) How things were said! ...joked McGovern with a smile......she said dryly......Zack said in a serious tone......John asked with a slight laugh. ...Zack replied with irritation... and that's all the same conversation. I really hope that this book gets another GOOD edit because I think the story deserves it. It's not a 3 star but not a 1 star either. So 2 it is. EDIT: I was indeed wrong on the comma usage. I apologize for that. It isn't easy living two languages in one head. 2nd EDIT: I should also add that the addressing with names or ranks is not so much what bugged me but more like how it was used. It's the repetition with really short sentences that makes it sound rather stilted and interrupts the flow.